Cedric

I am in the process of making this portrait of Cedric (Mars Volta). It's nowhere near finished. I could certainly use some advice. I think that I will smooth out the colors and bring back scratchy drawing on top and try to give some zest to the environment with more chroma.
In the original drawing he was teetering on tiptoes, and I'm feeling like the gesture is a bit lost, so I'm trying different compositions. Now that I look at it again, the smaller one seems to be better still, since he's about to fall right at you... uuuuuuuh need some time away from it...Here's the original.